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I am so lost
Can you find me?
Tucked away from the weary eyes of the world
where no one wants me anyway
will you even try?
call out my name?
or will you just leave...
Leave like they always do and worry to much about what you did wrong
and not what I could have done right
You have every right to leave
I want you to leave
But I don't want to be alone...
I don't want to be alone, because I'm scared
I'm scared that no one will find me on my own
And that no one wants me anyway
That they won't even try
that they've forgotten my name as they always do
Just leave
I'll be okay
I'm just so lost
And I'm afraid to be alone...
But I'm not afraid to be without you
©2006-2009 ~Aurora-Braxton
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This is a poem I wrote... If you don't understand the meaning of it... then too bad for you cause I'm not explaining it

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Some lines in your poem I found to be redundant, for example:

"You have every right to leave
I want you to leave" -- This can be fixed by using punctuation, a semicolon would fit here.

There are certain places that doesn't seem necessary and a bit wordy; although I do like the concept behind this, there's a very nice transition from the beginning to end which I find interesting.

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Well I like this in fact I think it's your best work ;-)
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I understand this poem very well, and have been there a time or two myself
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At first when I read your comment I kind of took it harshly. But then I thought about it and thank you for your helpful criticism... Not only am I bad with punctuation I can't spell either...
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Hmmm... I never heard this one. It makes me really sad. I have way to much to say about it to put on here so if you want you can ask me about it later.

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